Monday, December 04, 2006

Close Up for One Deep Breath


the lotus unfurls
beneath stained-glass wings; dragon
grasping the sacred


This week's prompt for One Deep Breath is Close Up (Close, Closer, Closest). Writing haiku is much more difficult than it would seem at first glance, but I so enjoy the challenge and the stumbling steps I'm taking with it. I may just add a haiku *how-to* book to my Xmas list this year. Santa always appreciates a suggestion or two! Also on my list this year is a macro lens for my camera; I've offered to pitch in to Santa's fund with the extra $ I make teaching... we'll see if Santa is feeling very generous this year.

I've posted this dragonfly and lotus pic before, but it is one of my absolute favorites - a happy accident from beside the pond - and especially nice to look at now that the fish and plants are asleep for the season.

25 comments:

Lynne said...

Ooooh Laura- that is a perfectly lovely picture!

Endment said...

Glad for the beauty of this flower on a cold winter day!

Haiku is adictive ...
But I do hope you get that "how-to" book

LauraHinNJ said...

Endment: Is my haiku THAT bad?

;-)

Lynne: That lotus was drop-dead gorgeous! Thanks.

Mary said...

Laura, you certainly have it. Everything you write is composed so nicely and makes a reader so comfortable. I love what you write and your Haiku is a lot better than mine! LOL! I want that book, too.

Susan Gets Native said...

Thanks for bringing us a bit of color on this first week of Decemberrrrrrrrrr.
It only got to 25 today. Yuck.

But we have spring to look forward to, in only....4 months. Darn.

lené said...

Your poem is gorgeous, Laura. I hope you don't mind if I jot it down in my book of favorite friend's poems.

A few years ago, I found a book on haiku that I really enjoyed. If you haven't seen Seeds From a Birch Tree, you may want to take a look when making your list.

Here's the link: http://search.barnesandnoble.com/booksearch/isbnInquiry.asp?z=y&EAN=9780786862429&itm=1

Mike Mc said...

Nice 'ku, with or without the picture. And, there are resources for learing more at http://www.ahapoetry.com/haiku.htm and http://www.haikuworld.org/. I have seen other useful sites but these are the only two I had handy.

samtzmom said...

Just beautiful!

Sandy said...

Laura,
Love it!!!
Great lines and photograph.

Becca said...

Beautiful haiku and photo. I like the "unfurling beneath stained glass wings." Lovely :)

Jone said...

Some of the best photography is a gift not planned. I love the second line in your haiku. And I hope Santa is good to you.

-llm. said...

Nice, Laura. Very nice. "grasping the sacred" is lovely!!!

NatureWoman said...

It's so nice to see flowers in our blogs this time of year. Very beautiful!

Crafty Green Poet said...

Lovely photo and words. I actually like that haiku are so much mre difficult than they first seem because it creates a real challenge and its good to take the journey towards the perfect haiku.....

vicki said...

Stained glass wings- I like that. Lovely.
Reading back, I've been to Sandy Hook Bird Observatory! So I really enjoyed thinking about you sitting there watching the boats and the birds.

robin andrea said...

I try my hand at haiku every now and then, so I appreciate the deft strokes of your pen on this one. Quite beautifully done, and an exquisite photo.

Patrick Belardo said...

Oooh... Macro... I'm so jealous!

what a great haiku
i dig looking at the odes
my haiku is bad

Simone said...

Pretty pic.
*binkie*

paris parfait said...

The haiku and photo are both beautiful!

Cathy said...

Beautiful picture. Beautiful words. So glad you shared them.

LauraHinNJ said...

Mary: Thanks! One of the links at the one deep breath site has a sort of contest where haikus are judged against one another - it was neat to read them and see how they're supposed to be done.

Susan: I'm hoping for snow soon!

Lene: Thanks for the book suggestion - seems like I'll have to go searching in a used bookstore. Why are the good books so often unavailable?

Mike MC: Thanks for the suggestions - need all the help I can find!

Thanks Sandy and Samtzmom! Having fun learning!

Becca and Jone: Thank you both for the encouragment.

Liza: Yea? Thought I was *grasping* myself with that!

Naturwoman: I need to see some summer colors too once in a while.

Crafty Green Poet: I love a good haiku and the way it surprises the reader.

Vicki: Have you been? I remember you said once that your dad loved Cape May.

Robin Andrea: Thanks. ;-)

Patrick: You're a poet too!

When I first read your comment I didn't realize you had written a haiku at all. To be honest when you said *odes* I thought you meant odes like poems. Then I realized you meant *odes* as in dragonflies - then I *saw* the haiku - very clever of you.

I'm excited about the macro too - it will sort of break the bank, though.

Simone: nosebonks back at 'ya!

paris parfait: Thanks!

Cathy: Thanks - I really enjoy the prompts when they give me an idea and I have a photo to match.

Bice said...

dragon grasping the sacred

THAT... is a great line. Wonderful!

susanlavonne said...

Gorgeous photo! And the haiku is so wonderfully descriptive that it stands on it's own merit :-)
I especially like how you used the word "sacred"...it really makes for a powerful ending.
Please keep coming back! (to ODB)

LauraHinNJ said...

Bice and Susan: Thank you both - I really enjoy ODP.

getzapped said...

Capitivating image and yes, the use of 'sacred' brings the soul to the whole thing! This moved me very much...